Memento Mori

'Well, because for a simple reason which is, I have hope.' I think it should be, 'Well, for this simple reason: I have hope.' I'm not sure though. Cool story ...

That was sweet. I liked it very much. There isn't much to fix. By the way, cute name. I like the name Cabbage. Maybe I'll name my next dog that. ...

1.) I don't really like Carrie all that much, mainly because she's not that realistic. William is more realistic, and I like him much better. However, this is your story, ...

. I'm pretty sure that the part where Javier took the girl was a bit choppy. Any suggestions on how to fix that? It's not that bad, really. In fact, ...

Great story! I love it, but Prince Charming is a little vulgar though. But then, he's what makes the story funny. I like this version of Snow White better than ...

It's all right, and Magnificent_ego covered everything I was going to say and more. One question though: What time period does this occur in? Did you make it up, or ...

1. Do you think it's to short/quick? No, I think it's just right. 2. What do you think of the description? Do I need more? No, that's good too. It ...

1: Did you get a basic feel for Isaria's and Guinevere's personalities? If so, what were the indicators? If not, how could I improve? Yes, I somewhat got the basic ...

It's pretty good, just go a bit easy on the descriptions next time. I found them way too long, and they didn't leave much for my imagination. Of course, this ...